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Comment on Romance In Teenagers!!! by Alice Lake

Alice Lake — Fri, 25 Feb 2011 20:24:24 +0000

“The flower that holds the butterfly” – what a great post Cindy. You have put it in a nutshell. I have checked out the website of the movie that you have mentioned. Nice!!! It seems to be a nice romance and it must be brand new. It is not even on google.
Nice trailer.

Comment on Romance In Teenagers!!! by Cindy

Cindy — Fri, 25 Feb 2011 14:08:27 +0000

the perfect love is out there but have you ever imagined how you might end up if you are not getting the perfect but the worst lover possible?

Scientist say that this is by far more likely! No panic, here comes the good news: Nobody is prepared for that )

In ‘LONGING FOR FREEDOM’ a pretty cool indie feature this is exactly the case. Jennifer goes through a nightmare and I admit the movie helped me to cope with my own (sometimes not so good) experiences.

So where ever you are and what ever you do I just wanted to let you know that one can survive. I did … but … it is better I think to be warned. Ok, this might be not the right blog for that kind of comment but I just wanted say this. Have a great day, Cindy

P.S. to answer your question: Strength attracts romace. This might sound a bit harsh but somehow I think if you have inner strenght then you have grace and humor and you are trust worthy and you dont have to be mean (you dont need to). In other words: you are the flower that can hold the butterfly.

Comment on Struggling a bit by isaac

isaac — Sun, 21 Nov 2010 22:38:24 +0000

This story is really good. You have writen alot and given good discriptions. You have a few spelling errors and things, but good story.

Comment on Struggling a bit by Rebecca

Rebecca — Sun, 21 Nov 2010 22:33:17 +0000

Hey Sarah,
This is a good story! I like it. Kate is a really good character. Only thing is that you kinda needed bit more commas and full stops, lol. (: xx♥

Comment on Writting on the wall by Miss W.

Miss W. — Fri, 19 Nov 2010 09:10:49 +0000

What a great review, Sarah. I like the extras that you added to the end of it, but if they were recommendations from other websites, remember to link back to them in your post.

Here is a link to some maths poems similar to yours. http://www.tooter4kids.com/classroom/math_poems.htm

Comment on Writting on the wall by Adelaide Dupont

Adelaide Dupont — Wed, 17 Nov 2010 23:11:10 +0000

Really enjoyed reading “Zero the hero”.

Tess is a great heroine too.

The problem might not work if it isn’t QWERTY = math talk.

Comment on Struggling a bit by Scotty

Scotty — Tue, 16 Nov 2010 00:07:55 +0000

Sarah – I am very proud of you, this is wonderful, thoughtful work

Comment on Struggling a bit by Scotty

Scotty — Tue, 16 Nov 2010 00:06:09 +0000

I excitedly opened the letter, inside was piece of paper with a gold edge and black writing. The writing said “Dear Kate Barrlos, I am excited to inform you that you have finished runner-up in our competition, which means that you are to be eligible for a years survival training on our beautiful Company Owned Island, and if any of our competition winners drop out of the competition you are the next to be chosen.” Kate was very excited at teh thought of this as they could rent theor home out for money (that they had little of) and they could live on a beautiful island together and also have all of their living expenses paid whilst learning a skill. Kate and her Husband never did return to their bedraggled old home, Kate become a world famous chef to the stars on deserted islands, making wonderful healthy food out of basic ingredients, and John went on to be a famous mime artist and he and Kate flew around teh world working and enjoying their life. Kate still mended socks that had holes in them as she had learnt to waste not want not and John still occasionally did statue work but gave any money that he made to charity as finally they had both made it!!

Comment on Struggling a bit by Miss W.

Miss W. — Mon, 15 Nov 2010 09:35:58 +0000

Sarah,
What a fantastic storyline! You painted a great picture through the words you used. Paragraphing is well done as is use of dialogue.

I think it is great to get your readers to finish the story for you. I wonder how exciting and creative these endings will be!

Be careful of are / our, bear / beer, passed / past

Perhaps a few more fullstops would make it easier for your viewers to read the story.

Comment on Struggling a bit by Adelaide Dupont

Adelaide Dupont — Mon, 15 Nov 2010 00:42:33 +0000

John opened the envelope. It was full of gold leaf. I slowly anticipated that it was going to grow mouldy. I didn’t want to give up our shared dream of going to the jungle.

“We will never go hungry again,” John said as we went through a market in a tropical country. The jungle was growing closer and closer all the time; but so were the nightmares. I began to feel the flushes when we were in our mosquito net.

John didn’t understand at all. He was seeing business opportunities everywhere. His eyes were gleaming with ambition.

Then it came.